Today's e-mail brings an invitation from Cal Performances containing the most complicated sentence I've read in a long while:
Forget sentence diagramming: You need a headlamp, a pickax, and a compass to get to the end of that accretion. It's writing by committee: forty-four words, seven prepositional phrases (beginning with from, of, of, of, in, in, and to), wordiness ("true masterpiece"), and a dizzying swerve in meaning (the hard right turn at "our records show").
No sentence should labor this hard—especially a sentence in a marketing pitch. This one should have been broken into shorter, more easily digestible segments.
Here's how the e-mail begins:
And here's how I'd rewrite what follows:
(Note that it's May 29, not 29th, and that the date must be set off between a pair of commas. In the first paragraph, "anniversary" should be lower case; it would be capitalized only in a title.)
By the way, the e-mail also mis-punctuated the name of Morris's work, which is based on a Handel score of the same title: there's a comma after "L'Allegro."
Handel was, of course, a Baroque composer. Perhaps the baroque sentence in the Cal Performances e-mail was intended as an homage.